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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line charts illustrate the amount of New
Zealand
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imports
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 from two different countries,
Australia
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 and
Japan
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, over a ten-year period.
Overall
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, both graphs are shown to fluctuate throughout the years 1994 to 2004.
However
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, New
Zealand
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Imports
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 from
Australia
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 depict a general
increase
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,
while
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Imports
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 from
Japan
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 experienced a decrease. On
one
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the one
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 hand, looking at
Australia
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,
imports
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 began at 4000
million
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 in 1994, about 1000
million
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 more than goods brought in from
Japan
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. In the next two years, the
value
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 of products purchased increased to a
value
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 between 6000 and 7000
million
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, followed by a drastic decrease to less than half by 1999. From 1999 onwards, there was a sharp
increase
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 in money spent on goods from
Australia
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, depicting an
overall
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increase
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. In 2004, the Australian
imports
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 end with an amount of 8000
million
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, twice the amount that they had at the beginning of the decade.
On the other hand
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,
Japan
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 earned 3000
million
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 from New
Zealand
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 in 1994. There
then
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 was a steady rise in
imports
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 until 1997,
where
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when
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 the
value
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 peaked at a
value
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 above 6000
million
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, a two-fold
increase
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. After 1997, there was an
overall
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 decrease in money spent by New
Zealand
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 to bring in products from
Japan
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, ending with 2000
million
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 in 2004, 1000
million
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 less than at the start of
this
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 period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, imports, australia, japan, increase, million, value with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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