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The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

The charts below show the percentage of food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
The graph below depicts information based on the ratio of how many people ate out in
restaurants
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 in 4 various years,
in addition
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, the line chart illustrates the amount of
food
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 which is served in fast
food
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 and sit-down
restaurants
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.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that the percentage of people who cooked
meals
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 at home diminished,
while
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 the share of
meals
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 which were eaten outdoors witnessed an increase over the given period.
Moreover
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,
according to
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 the line graph, both of the indications experienced a rise,
while
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quantity
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the quantity
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 of the population who preferred
food
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meals
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 surged
alongside
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over
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 the years.
Initially
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, the percentage of
food
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 budget in home cooking and fast
food
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 constituted 90% and 10% in 1970, respectively. Afterwards, the outlay of buying restaurant
meals
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 underwent a growth to 35% in 1990,
while
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 home cooking declined year by year and comprised 35%. Ultimately,
at the end
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 of the period, both figures demonstrated the same at 50%.
On the other hand
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,
at
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in
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 the beginning years, the rate of fast
food
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 and sit-down
restaurants
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 was observed at the same point 20 in 1970,
then
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 rose gradually to approximately 25 and 35,
accordingly
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 in 1980. The number of fast
food
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meals
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 surpassed until the end and reached
peak
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to
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of
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 85 in 2000. Regarding to sitdown
restaurants
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 witnessed continuous growth till the end.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurants, food, meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage of food budget
  • Fast food restaurants
  • Sit-down restaurants
  • Trends
  • Increase/decrease
  • Rise in popularity
  • Gradual rise
  • Cultural factors
  • Economic growth
  • Busy lifestyles
  • Changing societal norms
  • Proliferation
  • Casual dining experiences
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