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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The line graph illustrates the
mass
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 of
fish
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,
lamb
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,
chicken
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 and
beef
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 eaten by a population in Europe from the
year
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 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, the
mass
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 of
fish
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 consumed was the
least
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lowest
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 throughout the period.
On the other hand
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,
beef
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 and
lamb
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, which were the two most popular
meats
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types of meat
slices of meat
lumps of meat
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 eaten, experienced a general
decrease
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.
Chicken
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 had a constant increase in demand over the years, reaching the highest
mass
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at the end
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.
Firstly
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, in the
year
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 1979, just under 150g of
chicken
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 was ingested per week.
However
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, its popularity increased, quickly surpassing the demand for
lamb
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 just after 1979. The
mass
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 of
chicken
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 rose and overtook the amount of
beef
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 in 1989. Between 1999 and 2004, the weight of
chicken
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 reached its peak above 250g, and ended
with
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at
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 250g in 2004.
On the other hand
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,
fish
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 was consumed the least, with each individual ingesting just over 50g. There were no significant changes over 25 years, only a slight
decrease
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 where it ended at 50g of
fish
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 per person every week
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.
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Additionally
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,
beef
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 has the highest demand
amongst
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among
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 all meats and
fish
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,
each
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with each
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 individual consuming between 200 to 250g per week.
However
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, there was a sharp
decrease
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 in the middle of 1979 and 1984, dropping by about 100g, reaching 150 to 200g. In the same
year
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, a sudden rise in
beef
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 occurred, peaking near 250g in 1984. After 1984, the amount of
beef
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 eaten started to undergo a general
decrease
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,
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 and eventually stopped at slightly over 100g in 2004.
Furthermore
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,
lamb
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 was the second most consumed item which had a value of 150g in 1979.
Then
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, a gradual
decrease
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 happened over the next 25 years, concluding with just above 50g in the
year
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 2004.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, on the other hand".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mass, fish, lamb, chicken, beef, year, decrease, g with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • trend
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • plummet
  • soar
  • steady
  • exponential
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • food industry
  • innovation
  • cultural shift
  • economic conditions
  • demographic changes
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