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The bar chart below shows the Percentage of Australian man and woman in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the Percentage of Australian man and woman in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the amount
regular
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of regular
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 physical
exersice
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exercise
 the men and women are doing in five different
age
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 groups in 2010, measured in
percent
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per cent
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. Overview, it is clear from the chart that in general the number of
female
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females
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 doing physical activity
are
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is
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 higher than
male
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males
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.
additionaly
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Additionally
, younger people
in
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of
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 both
gender
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genders
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 have much ability
in doing
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to
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exersice
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exercise
 than older people. In
details
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detail
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, the percentage of women doing
exersie
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exercise
were
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was
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 increasing
dramaticly
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dramatically
through
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apply
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in younger
age
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 groups from 15 to 54, from less than 50% in the
age
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 15 to 24 and it
reaching
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reached
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 above 50% in 45 to 54.
on the other hand
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,
man
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the male
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 percentage
in
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apply
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doing
activety
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activity
 started
higher
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to higher
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 than it
decreasd throu
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decreased through
 the
age
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diffrence
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difference
, above 50 % of men in
younger
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the younger
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age
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 group from 15 to 24 were doing activity regularly.
while
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 the percentage of of
male
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males
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 doing
execrise
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exercise
 reduced to less than 40%
inin
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in
 the middle
age
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 group 35 to 44.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Gender difference
  • Proportion
  • Participation rate
  • Exercise
  • Physical fitness
  • Observation
  • Likely causes
  • Activity levels
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