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The chart shows the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants

The chart shows the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants
​The graph demonstrates how much money was allocated
on
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to
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 restaurant
meals
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 by moderate
family
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families
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 in four various time
period
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periods
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. The second line graph indicates the number of
meals
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 which were eaten in two alternative restaurants
such
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 as fast-food and sit-down. ​Looking at an
overall
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 structure it is readily apparent that the ratio of food budget on restaurant
meals
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 increased in the given time frame
whereas
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 home cooking went down and both showed the same point in the ultimate year. In the line
graph
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graph,
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 the number of
meals
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 in fast-food and sit down were equal indication in the initial time but they rose in the final year. ​
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 ,there was
noticeable
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 improvement in
fast food
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fast-food
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meals
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 .In 1970 it was 20 ,but in 2000 reached approximately 95 and showed a sharp change during the years. The opposite was true sitdown when it comes to development but it witnessed moderate maturing in 30 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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