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The line graph below shows the production of different types of fuel in the UK from 1981 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the production of different types of fuel in the UK from 1981 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below
provids
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provides
 key information about the production of different types of fuel in the UK
fromn
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from
 1981 to 2000. In
this
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topic
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topic,
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 I will write about what I see
in
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apply
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Linking Words
this
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apply
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below.
First,
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rate
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the rate
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 of people
used
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using
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the
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apply
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Natural gas in 1981 it 40, the same as in 1986 and 1991. And the proportion continued until 2000 to 100.
Second,
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the
rate
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 of people
used
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who used
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the
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apply
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Coal in 1981 it 80. And it decreased
at
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to
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 about 39 between 1984 and 1985.
Althogh
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Although
, it
rising
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rose
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 to 60 in 1986.
Also
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, the percentage continued
dwcline
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decline
 until 2000 at about 38.
Third,
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Use synonyms
rate
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the rate
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 of Petroleum
it
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apply
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descreased
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decreased
at
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to
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 about 90 in 1981. And the
rate
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 continued
rose
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to rise
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 until 1984 to 140 , the same as in 1985 and 1986 .
Also
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, the
rate
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descreased
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decreased
 to 100 in 1991.
Although
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, it rose in 1996 to 140 , the same as in 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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