If all workers in a company were paid exact same wage regardless of job role there would be much more harmony and cooperation between staff. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

People argued that employees should be paid
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the same salary and
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despite their work responsibilities to create equality towards workers in
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. In
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I will elaborate why I strongly
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disagree
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perspectives
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, as it is unfair for some positions.
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with, some
job
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positions demand
specalized
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specialised
skills and
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, requiring the participants to have
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minimum capabilities and experiences in order to apply in related fields.
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, particularly in management level roles demand people to have
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from certain universities or
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from standardized training centres. All those
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are useless for a non-technical
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like
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or receptionist. Someone with communication and administrative skills without minimum education could have done that
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training and education are essential, certain positions conduct greater duties and
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authority.
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management
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level
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CEOs determine concepts and strategies for organisations, and employees ensure that the company stays aligned with those strategies.
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it is clear that
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some occupations
contibute
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contribute
more to business growth than
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and
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justify high wages. In conclusion, paying the same wages to all employees
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not actually giving harmony and fairness because every employee has gone through different levels of education and effort to secure that
job
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with different contributions to
enterprise
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the enterprise
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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize the ideas in clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea clearly.
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You have a clear opinion and you stated it in the introduction.
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You provided reasons and examples to support your view.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmony
  • cohesion
  • financial incentive
  • productivity
  • equity
  • organizational culture
  • highly skilled professionals
  • innovation and competitiveness
  • redistribution of tasks
  • job satisfaction
  • meritocracy
  • contributions and achievements
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