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The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The pie chart illustrates , the proportion of
time
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 a person spends on numerous
activity
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activities
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 in a specific country in 1958 and 2008 .
Overall
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 , an individual spent more
time
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in
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apply
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working and
least
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less
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time
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 in other extracurricular activities . there is
increase
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an increase
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 in certain
activies
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activities
 like working , travelling
due to
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 work and relaxing .
Whereas
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 , a decline in sleep and going out is evident . The people spent
most
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the most
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time
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in
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apply
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working which increased gradually from one third to about half of
propertion
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proportion
. relaxing , travelling and grew steadily to 13% and 18% respectively . Other interest or extracurricular activities
was
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were
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 almost stable and showed minimal variation from 6 % to 8% .
On the other hand
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 ,
sleeping
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the sleeping
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 rate of citizens declined steeply from
one third
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one-third
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 to a
quater
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quarter
.
While
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,
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apply
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spending
time
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 with family declined from 19% to 16 % .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • increase
  • decrease
  • shift
  • balance
  • time
  • significant
  • household tasks
  • leisure
  • reflect
  • importance
  • education
  • personal development
  • stable
  • constant
  • development
  • focus
  • responsibilities
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