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The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In 1980, the majority of
workers
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 in all four countries were in the farming
sector
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, but by 2010, there was a shift towards more
workers
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 in the industrial and
service
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 sectors for most countries.
Country
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 A showed a significant decrease in farming
workers
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 from 60% in 1980 to 20% in 2010, indicating a movement towards industrial jobs, which increased from 25% to 50%.
Country
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 B maintained a balanced employment distribution across farming, industry, and services in 1980, with slight increases in the industrial and
service
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 sectors by 2010, indicating economic growth.
Country
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 C had the lowest percentage of farming
workers
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 in 1980, but saw a rise in the
service
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sector
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 by 2010, showing a shift to more skilled jobs.
Country
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 D showed consistent growth in the
service
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sector
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, increasing from 15% in 1980 to 45% in 2010, suggesting a trend towards more tertiary
sector
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 jobs.

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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • sector
  • distribution
  • dominance
  • decline
  • significant changes
  • employment
  • patterns
  • trends
  • global
  • compare
  • highlight
  • examine
  • identify
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