The line shows the consumption of fast food among teenagers between 1975 and 2000. Summarise the informatsion by selecting and reporting the main features , and make comparison where relevant

The graph compares how many times Australian
teenagers
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consumed three types of fast food from 1975 to 2000.
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,
fish
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and
chips
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became less popular among Australian
teenagers
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,
while
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the consumption of
hamburgers
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and pizza increased over the period. By the end of the period,
hamburgers
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were eaten the most, and
fish
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and
chips
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became the least preferred fast food At
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1975
fish
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and
chips
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were the most popular.
Teenagers
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them about 100 times per year. Afterwards, the figure went down gradually each year and reached 40 in 2000.
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teenagers
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at more
hamburgers
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started at 10in 1975 and increased to 100 in 2000 pizza started at about 5 and to 85 in 1975
then
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stayed the same.
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shows that
teenagers
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changed their eating over time. In the
1970
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1970s
and early
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1980s
1980
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1980,
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they
prefferred tradinional
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preferred traditional
food like
fish
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and
chips
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.
whereas
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later more western style foods like more western style foods like
hamburgers
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and pizza become popular

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Make sure to use more clear comparison words, like 'in contrast' or 'similarly' to show differences and similarities.
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Try to provide more specific numbers for each category, and make sure to explain trends clearly, using complete sentences.
task achievement
You summarized the main trends well, showing the change in fast food preferences over time.

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