Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, say what you have learned in your present job suggest how the company would benefit from moving you to a different department explain why you do not wish to leave the company You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Mr.Smith, I am writing
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letter to let you know about my interest in
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.Currently, I am working in
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department, where I have improved my communication and interpersonal skills. I
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heard about the opening of
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position in
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and safety department'
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week via co-workers.
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, I did some research
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the website to
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about the requirements for
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role.Fortunately, It matches with my prior experience.
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, I can confidently say that
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would be an asset for the company to hire me for
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position.
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,
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could
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lot
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of time and money involved in
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process. I
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working in
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company since 2015. Every year,
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organization come up with growth
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opportunities
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in other big companies.I strongly believe that my efforts and hardworking attitude could help me to reach at top management level one day which could be only possible in
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firm. Hoping to hear positive from your side. Yours Sincerely, Ramandeep

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Try to include a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. This helps your letter flow better.
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Make sure to use polite language throughout the letter to maintain a professional tone.
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Separate different ideas into different paragraphs. This will make your points clearer.
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You clearly express your interest in a new position, which shows initiative.
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You demonstrate your loyalty to the company, which is a positive quality.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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