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The line graph shows the price of banana in Japan, France, Germany, and the USA from 1994 to 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph shows the price of banana in Japan, France, Germany, and the USA from 1994 to 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph presents the changes in banana
prices
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 in
Japan
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, France, Germany, and the USA from 1994 to 2004.
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, it can be observed that
prices
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 fluctuated in each country over the decade, with notable differences in trends among the regions. In
Japan
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, banana
prices
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 started at a considerably high level
in
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at
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 the beginning of the year but showed a gradual decline until
twentieth
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the twentieth
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, after which they stabilized.Germany's
prices
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was
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were
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 a similar trend to
Japan
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 that they
was
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were
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 in the middle cost apart from some changes,
while
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 the USA showed
stable
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a stable
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prices
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price
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 increase
at the end
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 of the year.In conclusion, all four countries had different ways that banana
prices
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 changed from
beginning
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the beginning
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 to ending of the year.
Japan
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 and Germany saw
prices
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 go down,
while
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 France had
prices
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 that kept going up. The USA had
prices
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 that stayed steady.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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