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The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country, namely timber, pulp and paper, from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The line graph outlines the
production
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 of timber, pulp and paper in a European country between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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, there was an upward trend in the number of forest industry
production
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 during the whole period. The
production
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 of pulp was the highest one in the initial year, which was nearly 6
million
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tonnes
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. But it witnessed
sharp
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a sharp
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dicrease
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decrease
, there was an immediate recovery in 1985. After about 10 years of stability, it showed
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a gradually
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gradually
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gradual
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 increase to below 10
million
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tonnes
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at the end
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 of the period. The
production
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 of paper was the lowest at the beginning. It showed consistent growth for about 10 years. The number of its
production
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 reached a peak of 9
million
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tonnes
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 in 1995. Despite
of
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apply
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a
mariginal
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marginal
 decline to 8
million
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tonnes
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,
at the end
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 of the
period
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period,
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 it climbed sharply to 12
million
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tonnes
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, which was the highest of all. The usage of timber in
forest
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the forest
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 industry was about 5
million
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tonnes
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 in 1980. In spite of the fact that it reached a peak of 10
million
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tonnes
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 in 1985, it
followed
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was followed
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 by a fall till 1995. With rapid changes, the number of its
production
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 was below 8
million
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tonnes
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 in 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production trends
  • output
  • timber
  • pulp
  • paper
  • gradually declining
  • depletion of resources
  • industrial focus
  • significant increase
  • growing demand
  • raw material
  • steady rise
  • stable market
  • finished products
  • consumer needs
  • surpassed
  • shift in priorities
  • renewable resources
  • sustainability
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