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The first chart shows the percentage of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The first chart shows the percentage of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about the percentage of males and females who do housework and how much
time
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 they spend doing it each day.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that cooking and cleaning are done by
women
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,
while
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men
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 do
pet
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care
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 and
house
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 repairs.
However
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,
women
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 spend a longer
time
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 doing
house
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 chores than
men
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. Looking at the details, the largest proportion of
women
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 do cooking, with 80% and around 60% of
women
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 do cleaning. The percentage of
men
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 doing
this
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 housework is 20% lower, with 60% and 40% respectively. The proportion of
men
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 was higher when it came to doing
pet
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care
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 (22%) than
women
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 (20%).
Similarly
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, more
men
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 do
house
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 repairs, with 19%,
while
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 only about 7% of
women
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 do it. When it comes to the
amount
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 of
time
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 each gender spends on each task per day,
women
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 spend a large
amount
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 of
time
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 doing
house
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 tasks, 85
minutes
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 on cooking and approximately 70
minutes
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 on cleaning. In the case of
men
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, they devote 60
minutes
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 to cooking and 43
minutes
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 to cleaning. Both genders spend the same
amount
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 of
time
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 on
pet
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care
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, 20
minutes
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. For
house
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 repairs,
men
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 allocate the same
amount
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 of
time
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 as
pet
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care
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, but
women
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 spend only 5
minutes
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, women, men, pet, care, house, amount, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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