The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrates the top ten nations for the
production
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and usage of electricity in the year 2014. The data is measured in billion kWh.
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China comes first following
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States as
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the highest
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proportion of
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has been noticed,
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by other places like Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea respectively.
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, Germany is the only country
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has more consumption than
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in
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time.
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, Russia has
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difference between making and using a source
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19 billion kWh; which is the lowest difference compared to any other country;
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United
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States
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highest difference between their ability to make 4099 and consumption at 3866.
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, Japan and India have their
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of electricity
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than 930 and 850. To add on the consumption is less
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860 and 690 respectively.
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, countries like France, Brazil and Germany have around the same rate of
production
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and usage of electricity.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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