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The chart beiow shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart beiow shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart
decribes
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describes
the
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information
about
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 the
precentage
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percentage
 of households who
live
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lived
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 either in owned or rented
accomdation
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accommodation
 in
the
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parts of England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
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,in 1918 most households lived in rented
accomdation
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accommodation
but since
then
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 the
numbers
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number
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 of
people
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 residing in rented
homes
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 has declined and
people
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 living in
homes
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 owned by them increased.In 1971,the number of
people
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 who owned and rented places
were
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 equal. In 1918 almost 80% of the
people
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 lived in rented
homes
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 but after 1918 the number of
people
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 who lived in rented places steadily declined.In 2011 almost half of the
pepole
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people
 had stopped living in rented places and had started living in
homes
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 owned by themselves. Where rented accommodation faced a decline,owned accommodation
were
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 on
a
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the
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 rise. In 1918 only 22%
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people
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of people
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 owned
there
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their
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 place but in 2011 the number surged to more than 60%.In 2001 70% of
people
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 owned
there
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their
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homes
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 which was the highest throughout
this
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 period. 1971 is one
such
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 time where
people
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 who were renters and
people
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 who were owners were equal.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, homes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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