Traffic congestion and housing problems in larger cities could be solved by moving large industries and factories and their employees to the rural areas. What extent do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays, it has been argued that the best way to tackle the problem of traffic congestion and housing in urban areas
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moving large industries and
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with their workers to the countryside.From my point of view
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absolutely disagree with the statement
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the damage which will happen to the environment in the area. In
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I will support my opinion by showing the drawbacks. One of the main disadvantages of taking the business facilities to the rural areas is that it will cause issues for the local people.
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kinds of pollution
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as air pollution, noise even water pollution.
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lifestyle,
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they are moving that to them
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citizens life
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will be ruined
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they may get angry so
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could cause a massive strike.Take China as an example
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they had a significant increase in
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the issue was solved
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people were not happy. Another negative to support
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will see a dramatic drop in the number of harvesters . Despite the fact
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people will face a real
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around the
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the natural proudest as they are becoming
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. In conclusion, having looked at the topic in detail , on balance,
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it is true that the problem will disappear in the capital city , but
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will cause it in
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. In my opinion, it is a wild idea to make it so
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hope the government think of other ways.

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Make sure to clearly outline your main points in the introduction. State your position clearly in one sentence.
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Use clear linking words to connect your ideas. For example, use 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to guide the reader.
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Expand on your examples. Explain clearly how your examples are related to the main points.
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You have taken a clear position in your essay, stating that you disagree with the statement.
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You presented a relevant example with China, which supports your argument against moving industries to rural areas.
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