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Writing Samples
Band 5

Many employees can now do their work from home using modern technology. However, this change may only benefit the workers, not the employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With modern sophisticated technology,
instead
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 of travelling to work, many
workers
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 have started working from
home
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which
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, which
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 in turn,
have
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has
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 changed the traditional working environment. Many people believe,
this
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 change in tradition has benefited more to employees
rather
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more
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 than
organisations
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. In my opinion,
althought
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although
,
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apply
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 both points have merit of their own,
but
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apply
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it works in favour of
workers
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as well as
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 employers. First of all, it saves
time
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 of
commutation
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, which in turn saves
huge
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a huge
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 amount of
time
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 and money for the
workers
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. In busy cities, where employees need to travel through different means of transport from
workplace
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the workplace
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 to
home
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 and vice versa,
this
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 new process has changed their complete lifestyle.
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, in cities like Mumbai and
Dehli
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Delhi
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,
average
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the average
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 travelling
time
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 of an office worker is around 1 hour and 30 minutes, which
now they can
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they can now
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 use towards something productive in their personal or professional life.
Moreover
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, working from
home
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 has benefits like additional comfort, more concentration, and, relaxed environment. So,
this
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 trend has huge advantages for the working class with money and their
time
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 that can be used towards family and personal growth.
On the other hand
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, with all the employees working from
home
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, the
organisations
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 can now save money with less need
of
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for
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 infrastructure,
equipments
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equipment
, and renting
office
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an office
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 building.
This
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also
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give
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gives
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 opportunity to
organisations
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 for hiring from the pool of global workforce as they are no longer constrained by the demographic
boundries
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boundaries
.
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, with everyone working from
home
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 only major requirements are devices and internet
which
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, which
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 are easily accessible
and
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, and
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 companies can hire workforce from different parts of
world
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the world
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 without worry about relocation. To deduce,
this
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help
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helps
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organisations
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 to hire staff from a
very
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apply
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vast pool
which
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, which
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 gives them highly qualified
workers
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.
Overall
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,
this
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 new trend has benefits for the working class and management in different ways
like
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, like
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economical
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economic
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, work-life balance,
huge
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and huge
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 opportunities.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure all ideas are clearly linked to maintain flow. Use simple phrases to connect sentences better.
task achievement
Be careful with grammatical errors (e.g. 'have' should be 'has' when referring to 'change').
task achievement
Strong supporting points about time and money saving for workers and companies.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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