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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In the
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 chart illustrates
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the use
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 of water
fot
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for
 industrial,
agrcultural
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agricultural
 and domestic
in
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purposes in
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 six different
continent
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continents
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 of the world: North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central Asis and South East
Asia
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, in four
field
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fields
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 ( Africa , Central
Asia
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 , South East
Asia
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 and South
America
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 ) they use significant
Agrcultural
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agricultural
,
while
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 in North
America
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 and
Europe
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Europe,
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 where the majority used Industrial
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, approximatly
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 50%.
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, the purposes of
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using
 Domestic
is
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are
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 less for all of the
regions
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regions,
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were
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where
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no
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 of them use it the most.
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,
industrial
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 is
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minimal in Central
Asia
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, South
America
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oand
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and
 Africa
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 7% for
Aftica
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Africa
 and 7% to 10% for
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Central
Asia
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also
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, also
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 with South
America
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.
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america
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America
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 and Europe, industrial is the largest proportion of water
spend
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, at 53% and 43%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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