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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line bar illustrates five portions of fruits and vegetables
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that was
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was
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were
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ate
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eaten
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 by people daily in
percentge
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percentage
 between 2001
t0
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and
 2008 in the UK.
Overall
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, there was a significant increase in the number during the five years
than
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, than
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 it jumped
to
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of
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 achieved 35%
as
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is
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a
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the
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 highest rate in general
,
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.
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after
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that
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that,
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 the rate has reduced to
normal
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a normal
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consume
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level, similar
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like
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to
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it
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what it
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 used to be in the past for
United
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the United
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Kingdoom
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Kingdom
. In 2001, the
mans
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man's
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consuming was
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consumption
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 increased slightly year by year
untill
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until
 it reached
th
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the
 peak time
on
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in
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 2006,
like wise
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likewise
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 for the women and children. In 2007, the daily
eatn
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consumption
 of
fruites
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fruits
 and vegetables
are decrease
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decreased
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 a
littel
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little
 bit to
be reached
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reach
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 30%
wich
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which
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 is the
usuel
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usual
 rate,
whereas
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 the children and women
keep
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apply
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maintain
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maintained
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 their
percent
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percentage
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 for
the
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apply
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the previous three years.
To sum up
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, we could say that
chrt
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children
 appear
a
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to have a
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huge
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higher
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 consumption
from
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of
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male
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food
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 than
female
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females
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,
while
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children
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males
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is
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have
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 the
lowest
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highest
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 food
eater
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consumption
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 in the entire period in the UK.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • people
  • fruits
  • vegetables
  • daily
  • increase
  • consumed
  • guideline
  • indicating
  • low
  • awareness
  • healthy
  • eating
  • habits
  • public
  • health
  • campaigns
  • positive
  • effect
  • diet
  • notable
  • rising
  • suggest
  • demographics
  • reflect
  • attitudes
  • nutrition
  • years
  • habits
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