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The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods (wheat, maize, rice) by people in four different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the consumption of three carbohydrates (wheat,
rice
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 and
maize
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) in four countries. The unit is measured in calories per person per day.
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, Cambodia accounted for the highest
consumer
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 of
rice
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.
In addition
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, Poland
comprised
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consumed
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 almost nothing in
maize
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consumption
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apply
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. Starting with the lowest two consumers,
Egypet
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Egypt
 saw the highest consumption in
rice
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 with almost 1445
but
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, but
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 in wheat and
maize
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 gained under 110, with 18 and 103 respectively. In Poland,
accounted
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it accounted
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 for the lowest
consumer
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consumption
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in
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of
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rice
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 and
maize
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 with 19 and 0 calories respectively, but in wheat it ranked as the second highest consumer with 865.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, maize with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • basic foods
  • staples
  • dietary preferences
  • agricultural output
  • nutritional intake
  • per capita
  • predominant
  • subsistence crops
  • culinary habits
  • food security
  • statistical overview
  • consumption patterns
  • comparative analysis
  • domestic production
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