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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart
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illustrates
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 the
rates
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 of distribution of science qualifications in both
Malaysia
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 and
Singapore
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.
Overall
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, both countries have the highest percentages of
none qualificated
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non-qualified
 people in science. And the
least
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lowest
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rates
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 on
master
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master's
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 degrees.
Singapore
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outweight
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outnumbers
Malaysia
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 in bachelor's
degree
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degrees
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with
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by
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 about
one tenth
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one-tenth
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.
One
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On
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 the other hand,
Malaysia
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 has more individuals in school leaving exams with an
approximately
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of
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percentage of
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 35
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percent
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per cent
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.
Apove
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Above Singapore
singapore
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rates
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 with almost five
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percent
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per cent
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.
Mainwhile
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Meanwhile
, both countries have
the
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apply
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almost the same rate in master's
degree
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degrees
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with
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, with
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 about four
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percent
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per cent
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.
Malaysia
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 made up to around 65
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percent
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per cent
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in
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of
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 people with no
quialification
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qualification
 in science. In
compartion
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comparison
,
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singapore
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Singapore
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 has lower
rates
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 with about 60
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percent
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per cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, malaysia, singapore, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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