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Destinations of UK Graduates and Postgraduates (Excluding Full-Time Work) in 2008”

The bar chart illustrates graduate and postgraduate
students
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United
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State
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 who didn’t
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nor
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apply
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full time
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full-time
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 after finishing college in 2008 in four
type
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types
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 (
part time
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part-time
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work
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, voluntary
work
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,
further
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 study, and unemployment).
Overall
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, the number of
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 on
further
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 study was
a
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the
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 highest for each one of them (
graduates
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 and
postgraduates
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).
Then
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part time
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part-time
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work
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come
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came
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 on the second. And voluntary was
a
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the
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 lowest
students
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.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 the highest one,
further
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 study. It’s rich
29,665
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, 29,665
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 by
graduates
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.
In contrast
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,
postgraduates
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was
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were
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 2,725. The second highest a part-time
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it
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, it
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 was 17,735 by
graduates
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.
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Similarly
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 to
postgraduates
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 was 9,535.
Moreover
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, the third highest was
a
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apply
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unemployment.
Graduates
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was
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were
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 16,235
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whereas
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, whereas
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postgraduates
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was
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were
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 1,625. Voluntary
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was
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had
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 the lowest number of
students
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. It was 3,500 for
graduates
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 and 345 for
postgraduates
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.

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grammar
Make sure to use complete sentences and correct grammar to improve clarity.
clarity
Clearly label and explain all the data in the chart with comparisons where necessary.
structure
Add a concluding statement to summarize the main points and make your essay more complete.
data usage
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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