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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The graph
depict
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 the information about the visitors who visited the
UK
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 for various reasons
in
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over
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 a
two
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two-decade
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decade
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period
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 from 1989 to 2009.
Overall
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, the holiday
visitor
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 was highest compared to other
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visitor
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visitors
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,
while
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 the family
visitor
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 was lowest but
having increased
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had an increasing
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 trend. The business
vistor
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visitor
 was having
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a flutuating
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flutuating
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fluctuating
 trend. In
detailed
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a detailed
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 perspective of the graph, the
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Uk
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UK
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 can be considered as the holiday spot. More
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then
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than
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 6
million
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 tourists visited the
UK
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 in 1989
and
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, and
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 the numbers
was
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apply
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increasd
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increased
 till
year
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the year
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 1999 and reached
peak
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a peak
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 with more
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then
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than
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 9
million
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 visitors. After
that
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that,
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 the numbers
was
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declined and finished with just below 9
million
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visitor
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visitors
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 in 2009. On the other side,
people
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 are visiting
to
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apply
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the
UK
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 for
the
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apply
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business
purpose
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purposes
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 and to meet family is less compared to tourism. The family visit was at below 4
million
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people
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 in 1989 and increased till 2004 and
then
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 was slightly fall till 2009,
while
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 the business tours was at above 5
million
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people
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 in 1989 and
then
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 declined at 4
million
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 in next five years after that was climed till around 2007 and fell little in next 2 years and completed with nearly 7
million
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people
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 in 2009.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, visitor, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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