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The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the regional household recycling rates in the UK, France and Germany from the years 2005-2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the recycling average
rates
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 in 3
europe
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European
 countries between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
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, both the
UK
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 and
Germancy
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Germany
 recycling
rates
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 have increased noticeably in 10
years
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.
Whereas
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 the
rate
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 at which
France
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recycle
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recycles
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 has decreased. The 3 regional households
intercected
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intersected
 at one time, and almost the
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rate
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rates
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 were equal. Out of 3 regional households displayed in the chart, only
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Germancy
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Germany
 increased over the
years
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. The
UK
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 recycling
rates
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 went from around 35% in the year 2005 to almost twice that
rate
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 in the year 2015 with a
rate
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 of 60%
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 Germany used to have th lowest recycle
rate
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 out of the 3 countries, it was able to pick that up to slightly less than 60% in 2015 with around 40% increase in 10
years
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, and became the second highest
country
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 in recycling. Unlike
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UK
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the UK
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 and
Germancy
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Germany
,
France
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 is the only
country
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 to decrease over the
10
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past 10
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years
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.
France
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 started as the number one
country
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 in recycling;
however
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, 10
years
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 later and it has been reduced to the lowest
country
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 in recycling. With almost half of the households in
France
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to recycle
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recycling
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 in 2005, 8
years
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 later, only one third of the nation adhered to
maintain
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maintaining
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 recycling.
Although
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 it has steadily decreased from 2005
till
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to
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 2013,
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France
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France's
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 recycling
rates
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 rose to 40% in 2015.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, uk, years, rate, france, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional household recycling rates
  • overall trend
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • fluctuations
  • marginal decline
  • notable drop
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • year-on-year growth
  • data patterns
  • rate of change
  • noteworthy milestones
  • disparities
  • environmental policies
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