The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart reflects the proportion of
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water
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three kinds of reasons in six areas of the world. In conclusion,
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water
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the most in agriculture,and
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domestic
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the least,except
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and North
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. In
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Asia
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is used the most in agriculture,with 88%.Following the agricultural
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in Africa and South East
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80%.There
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71% agricultural
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in South
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.The
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in domestic in South East
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was the same as Central
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,and the industrial
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in Africa (7%).And the figure of
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was different,with 5% and 12% for Central
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and South East
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.
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in South
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was the second most(19%),and the industrial
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was about 10%. The agricultural
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both under 40%,but the
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the
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,with 53% and 48% respectively.And the
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in domestic
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about 15% in these two areas.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, america, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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