Percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010

The pie chart below shows the percentage of electricity which was produced by sources of fuel
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country in the years 1990 and 2010. In general, the most significant changes shown on the chart are
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nuclear power’s proportion and
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the amount of natural gas over the
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. In 1990,
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natural gas was used more widely in France
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however
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, its use experienced a sevenfold decrease
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between 1990 and 2010, dropping from about 28% to 4%.
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, the amount of electricity which was produced by nuclear power
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in the initial year
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increased sharply over the whole period, rising by 50 percentage points to reach approximately 67%. As for the remaining sources, coal
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which was the most
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source in 1990
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and oil both declined to similar levels, between two decades, falling from about 28% and 22% to 13%, respectively. Meanwhile, the use of hydropower remained the lowest over the given period, declining by 4% to constitute just 2%.

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Make sure to clearly present each part of the information. For example, list all the fuel sources and their changes together for clarity.
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Add a brief conclusion summarizing the main trends you discussed in the essay.
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You presented clear trends for nuclear power and natural gas, which shows a good understanding of the data.

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