The diagram below shows the changes of the town name Shakefield from 1995 until now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows the changes of the town name Shakefield from 1995 until now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the changes of the town name Shakefield from 1995 until now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The changes of the metropolis named Shakefield from 1995 to
present
Correct article usage
the present
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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anti-nature. If we take a look
to
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at
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1995
Punctuation problem
1995,
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there is a lot of green area around the town and there is less housing around the city.
Firstly
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,
Whether
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whether
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we look at the
present
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present,
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we clearly see that in these years the population
is
Verb problem
has
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risen
and
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, and
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from
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apply
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that
Correct determiner usage
apply
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in
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during
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these years
in
Punctuation problem
, in
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this
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city
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city,
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they
made
Verb problem
have built
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lots of apartments and holiday homes on every side of the township.
Secondly
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,
In
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in
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1995 there
are
Wrong verb form
was
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farm land
but
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, but
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in the present there is
tennis
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a tennis
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court and
golf
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a golf
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court. There are apartments
instead
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of a fish market
and
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, and
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also
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there are no morning fish
boat
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boats
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in
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apply
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present. In the
present
Add a comma
present,
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there
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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less
Fix the agreement mistake
fewer
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trees and less area than
1995
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in 1995
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. The only thing that didn't change is
coffee
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the coffee
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house. All in all,
My
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my
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personal thought is that they can increase green areas for
better
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a better
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life.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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