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The line chart below shows the per capita meat consumption in four different countries (USA, UK, Brazil and India) from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below shows the per capita meat consumption in four different countries (USA, UK, Brazil and India) from 1985 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart depicts the per
capita
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 chicken
consumption
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 in various nations like the USA, UK, Brazil and India between 1985 and 2019.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 by the time the
meat
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consumption
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 has soared in every nation , the highest
consumption
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 of chicken is in
USA
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the USA
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 and the least
consumption
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 is in India.
To begin
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 with, from 1985 to 2009, the
meat
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consumption
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 per
capita
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 in the USA increased by
an
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around 50 per
capita
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 from 90, by the end of 2019, it had a gradual decrease of 5
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capita
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 respectively.
Therefore
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, Brazil was holding third position with 60
capita
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 in 1985, but reaching in 2019 it had a hike by 70 per
capita
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 and secured the second highest
meat
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consumption
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.
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, the UK was the second highest
meat
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 consuming country in 1985 with an estimated 78 per
capita
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 by 2000,
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increased to around 22 per
capita
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 and by 2019 it was consistently on the same level and stood at 120 per
capita
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. India
overall
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 had
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an uplifted
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uplifted
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 in
consumption
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but
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 with a very slight increase , around 19 to 40
capita
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 from 19855 to 2019.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words capita, consumption, meat with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • per capita
  • consumption
  • line chart
  • trend
  • significant changes
  • remained stable
  • comparison
  • cultural factors
  • economic factors
  • environmental factors
  • infer
  • meat consumption
  • data suggests
  • period
  • shift in rankings
  • consumption patterns
  • observed data
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