Write a letter to the manager of your local bus service. They have recently made some changes to the bus services which created inconveniences for you. In your letter, explain: •what are the changes •what are the problems you are facing •what part of the service would you like to change You get 20 minutes to complete this task.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regard to the recent alterations made
in
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the route of
bus
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number
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2. Usually,
this
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bus
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used to
start
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from
transit
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terminal to Brier Park, Brantford, covering Lynden Park Mall and the nearby industries on
the
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Bodine Drive. After the changes in route, the public transport does not go to Bodine Drive where
the most of
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businesses are located. Since
,
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the route change
we
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, we
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have been taking
9
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the 9
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number
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bus
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which
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covers all the streets of Brantford before reaching
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Bodine Drive.
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further
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creates
a
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issue because we end up reaching
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work at 8:45 am,
whereas
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we are scheduled to start the shift at 8:00 am.
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is not just
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me
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problem
but
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there are
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number
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a number
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of people who get off on the same street as me and are late to work
everyday
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. Would you kindly consider the situation and schedule the 2
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number
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bus
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back to the previous area? If not, please do the needful to change the
bus
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timing so that we can reach the workplace at
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the right
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time. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Simranpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to enhance clarity.
task achievement
Try to provide more detailed examples of the problems caused by the route change for a complete response.
coherence and cohesion
Review your punctuation and grammar for smoother reading throughout the letter.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite tone, which is appropriate for a formal request.
complete response
Your request for changes is clear and straightforward.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commuter
  • inconvenience
  • reduced frequency
  • altered routes
  • travel time
  • miscommunication
  • transfers
  • public transport
  • passenger information
  • service improvements
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