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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In
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This
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this
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 bar chart shows the production and consumption of electricity
about
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in
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 ten countries
on
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at
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 the top in 2014. In the top one and two,
the
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apply
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China and the United States
has
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have
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 strong
about
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apply
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the
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apply
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electricity. But
the
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apply
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China is
strengthen
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stronger
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 than the USA
about
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in
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 both of
that
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these
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 two features.
However
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, the production in China had used more than the consumption. 76 billion
kwh
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kWh
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 is the number
of
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apply
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that
different
Verb problem
is different
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. The United States has that
different
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difference
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 too.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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