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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
dipict
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depicts
 ten countries on the top about
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production
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the production
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 and
consumption
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 of electricity in 2014.
China
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 was
on
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at
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 the top one about
production
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 with 5,398
billion
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kwh
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kWh
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, but
Korea
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 is
low
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 than all
will
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with
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 485,1
billion
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kwh
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kWh, which
 is about 4912,9
billion
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from
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kWh from
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Korea
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 to
China
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. Next to
China
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 is
United
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the United
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 States with 4099
billion
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production
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, more than
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Korea
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Korea's
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 3613,9
billion
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kwh
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kWh
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. And down of the bar chart
have
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are
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 Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil,
Germany
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and Germany
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, Brazil. About the
consumption
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 of electricity,
China
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 was
on
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at
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 the top 1 again with 5322
billion
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kwh
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, more than 4872,5
Korea
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, which was only 449,5. And down is
United
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the United
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 States, Russia, Japan, India, Germany, Canada, France,
Brazil
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and Brazil
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. Visibly,
China
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 in 2014 was
top
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the top
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 one
about
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in
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 electricity for
production
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 and
consumption
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 are the highest. And
Korea
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 was the lowest
is
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in
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top
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the top
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 10 with
production
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 and
consumption
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, china, billion, kwh, korea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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