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The line graph shows the unemployment rates in three countries (the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan) between 1993 and 2007.

The line graph shows the unemployment rates in three countries (the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan) between 1993 and 2007.
The
line
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 graph gives information about the unemployment rates in three countries (the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan) between 1993 and 2007.
Overall
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,
while
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 the United Kingdom was the biggest player in the story,
however
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, the rest of Europe was always considered to have the highest
rate
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 of unemployment in the story.
To begin
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 with, in Japan, it started from the
year
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 1993, with only 2 per cent, and it was the
rate
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 that was considered a
year
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 of stability in the
year
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 1999. When it was a
year
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 of 2001, it immediately increased to 6%. Unfortunately,
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 growth was not sustained , and the figure rebounded in 2007 with 4 per cent. Starting from the United Kingdom’s
line
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, As it mentioned the highest
rate
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 of the Redundancy it was equal to 12 percentages in the
year
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 1993,
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 the
line
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 peak was not maintained,
as a result
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 it declined until 1997, with 6% and there was small growth in the
year
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 1999, and again it decreased to the
year
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 2001, with 4% and
at the end
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 it followed by a steady and consistent growth in the lines until 2007, with 4 proportion. Starting from the highest level of the joblessness
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 in the rest of Europe, from the first beginning it was equal to 10 percentages in the
year
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 of 1993, and it showed the highest
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 in the history it continued until the
year
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 1999,
however
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 from that
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 there were lots of changes in that
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, it
initially
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 declined to 8% in 2001, and it faltered in one space, after some period it almost declined until 2007, with 8 percent.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, rate, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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