You have a problem with a recently hired employee in your workplace. Write a letter to the HR manager. In your letter describe the problem the new employee has caused explain how other colleagues feel about the new employee's conduct say how you expect the manager to address the situation.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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letter to express my concern about the employee you have hired. I
am
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have been
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working for
this
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company for the
last
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four years and I
never
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have never
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had
a
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such
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issue
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an issue
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before. The new joinee
play
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plays
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laud
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loud
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music during working time.
Although
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I
already have
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have already
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told him about the
compan's
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company's
policies, it seems like he is ignoring all the facts.
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music is not only affecting my performance, but
also
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causing a headache after my shift ends. Which makes me uncomfortable
while
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sleeping.
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, he
also
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smokes
cigrates
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cigarettes
in the lunch room.
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he smokes only when there is no one in the break room, there are several employees who are allergic to
cigrate
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cigarette
smoke, which
making
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makes
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them sick. I have already discussed these issues with my co-workers, and all of them are feeling discomfort because of his actions. It is quite stressful for all of us . I would like to request
you
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that you
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take strict action against him and ask him to complete his training again. I would really appreciate it if you could resolve these problems at your earliest. I hope you will understand our situation. Thank you, Yours sincerely, Amarpreet.

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grammar
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar. For example, 'cigrates' should be 'cigarettes' and 'laud' should be 'loud.'
task response
Try to provide more details about how the new employee's actions affect the workplace. This will strengthen your reason for the complaint.
coherence
Use clear paragraphs with one main idea in each. This will make your letter easier to read.
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You clearly stated the problems caused by the new employee.
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Your request for action shows you care about the workplace environment.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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