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The chart below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. summarise the informatiomn by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The chart below show the figure for hours per week in the industrial sector in four European countries in 2002. summarise the informatiomn by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The bar chart below provides data about how many
hours
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 per week community work in four different European countries , namely
France
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, Sweden, Denmark and the UK, in 2002.
Overall
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, the percentage of the community who worked 36-40
hours
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 was the highest,
while
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 the index of those who worked less than 14
hours
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 was the lowest among these countries. In 2002, in
France
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 , working about 35
hours
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 was the most popular , with just 40%,
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 in Denmark, most
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people
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 preferred to work no more than 40
hours
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 , with 70%. The percentage of job owners in
France
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 who worked 14
hours
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 per week was just under 10% and
this
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 figure was the least one. In Sweden, working from 36 to 40
hours
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,
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 was more widespread , with 80% and
this
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 indicator was higher than in the UK , where
this
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 indicator was only 50%.
In addition
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, the number of workers who spent time at work no more than 45
hours
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 was 25% and
this
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 was the average figure.
However
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, as it was in
France
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 and Denmark, the lowest amount of
hours
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 was from 1 to 14
and
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this
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 index was just below 10% in Sweden and the UK

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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