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The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country who participated in sports, compared with the papercentage of people who watched them in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of females aged 16-25 in a particular country who participated in sports, compared with the papercentage of people who watched them in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph
showes
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shows
 data
in
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for
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 females between 16 to 26
that
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who
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 participated in sports from
diffrent countres
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different countries
.
Overall
Linking Words
, in the six
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categories
categores
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categores,
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 most
for
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of
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 them
showes
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show
 that they
prepher
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prefer
 watching,more than participating .
first
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 of
all
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all,
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tinnis
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tennis
have
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has
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 the highest watching
rate
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 with 60
.
Punctuation problem
,
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and, with only 30
participate
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participants
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,
then
Linking Words
 comes
the
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apply
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basketball with 55
watcherest
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watchers
 and 50
participate
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participants
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.
after
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After
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 that comes the
theared
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apply
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highest
sport
Verb problem
rated sport
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 with
watching
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a watching
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rate
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 of 20 is
gimnastics
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gymnastics
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 participates number is 8.
Linking Words
on
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On
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 golf
have
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has
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high
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a high
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 participing 30
but
Punctuation problem
, but
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 only
10
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a 10%
 watching
rate
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, after
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. After
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 that comes badminton and horse riding and racing
with
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, with
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 no big
diffrens
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differences
 11participating and 5 watching
for
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rate for
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 badminton ,and 5 watching
rate
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 and
2 participing
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2% participation
 for
riding horse
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horse riding
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 and racing.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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