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The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates information about the number of
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workers in five sectors in uk, in 1841 and 2011.
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, the workforce in manufacturing accounted for
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the
 highest percentages,
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 people who worked in construction and energy/water showed the lowest figures throughout the whole period. In 1841, the number of workers in services and manufacturing accounted for 33% and 36% respectively. For those in services, the figure increased dramatically to
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 81% in 2011,
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 manufacturing employers experienced a significant decrease to 9%.
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, the proportion of people who
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 in agriculture/fishing witnessed a
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major descend from 22% in 2003 to 1%
at the end
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 of
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.
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 construction and energy/ water majors remained relatively stable at around 5% and 3% respectively in 2003, and
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 in 2011 at 8% and 1%.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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