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The Charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The Charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.
The Pie charts illustrate the results of the survey of the 100 guests of the Parkways Hotel to assess its customer
service
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, using the same questionnaire in both years 2005 and 2010.
Overall
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, the level of
service
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 improved dramatically , as suggested by an increased
percentage
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 of very satisfied visitors and a decreased
percentage
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 of those who were extremely dissatisfied. It is noticeable that the
percentage
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 of customers who responded "Good" increased significantly from 14% in 2005 to 39% in 2010.
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, the
percentage
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 of those who assessed
service
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 level as excellent went up almost six times from 5% in 2005 to 28% in 2010.
This
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 was mainly
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 a colossal decrease in the proportion of guests who rated hotel
service
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 as "Satisfactory" from 45% to 17%.
Additionally
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, the
percentage
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 of respondents with the
answers
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 "Poor" decreased approximately by half from 21% to 12% and the
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 of those individuals who were very dissatisfied with the hospitality of the hotel shrank more than threefold from 15% to 4%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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