The diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

This
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process elucidates
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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electricity
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of electricity
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for
the
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apply
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future homes to consume. It consists of six steps. It emerges through methane
gas
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. It is needed some equipments
such
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as
steel
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a steel
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tank, methane
gas
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storage,
compressor
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a compressor
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,
combustion
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a combustion
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engine,
generator
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a generator
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and
battery
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a battery
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.
Steel
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The steel
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tank is filled with leaves, food scraps and water. These composts are combined with methane
gas
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. Afterwards,
gas
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is gathered in a storage by passing through the pipe.
Then
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the
gas
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goes through a compressor. It is apparent
compressed
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that compressed
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gas
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is in the long process. Eventually, the
gas
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goes into a combustion engine. From
this
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machine, mechanical
energy
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indicates
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is indicated
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.
Subsequently
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, the mechanical
energy
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converts
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is converted
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to electrical
energy
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because
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by
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of generator.
Finally
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, a tool
that is
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called battery collects the whole electrical
energy
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.
Then
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, it serves electricity for
residence
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residential
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usage.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • sustainability
  • solar panels
  • energy storage
  • wind turbine
  • geothermal
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • grid
  • biomass
  • photovoltaic
  • smart meter
  • energy consumption
  • insulation
  • heat pump
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