The line graph shows information about the number of visitors who came to the Uk in terms of purposes, namely holiday, bysiness and visit friends and relatives over 20 years period between 1989 and 2009

The line graph shows information about the number of visitors who came to the Uk in terms of purposes, namely holiday, bysiness and visit friends and relatives over 20 years period between 1989 and 2009
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows information about the number of visitors who came to the Uk in terms of purposes, namely holiday, bysiness and visit friends and relatives over 20 years period between 1989 and 2009
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, all categories experienced
differenet
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different
trends during these years. The figures of business and holiday grew with some
fluctucations
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fluctuations
, the rate of
visit
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visits
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to close people increased gradually In
1989
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1989,
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the value of holiday was just over 6.5
millions
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million
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after it experienced a
steadil
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steady
increase to 9.5
million
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visitors in 1999, and it
decraased
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decreased
slightly to 7.5
million
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in 2004. As a
reslut
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result
, there was
gradual
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a gradual
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increase to 9
million
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visitors in the year 2009. Business travel was at 5.5
millions
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million
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at the beginning, after it decreased slowly to 4
million
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in 1990, and it increased rapidly to 7
million
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in 1999
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. Next
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next
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next,
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there was
fell
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apply
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declining
line
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decline
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in 2004 , after that it rose to 8
million
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visitors
rates
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apply
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. Visits to friends or relatives
also
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grew, from under 3
million
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in 1989 to around 6
million
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in 2005, but
then
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fell slightly to about 5.5
million
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in 2009

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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