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The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British student at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These charts illustrate the different percentages of British
students
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 at one university in the United Kingdom
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 who spoke other languages
besides
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Overall
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, it can be seen that
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 most of the
students
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 preferred to speak
Spanish
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 in both years.
Spanish
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 was noted to be very popular among
students
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 in two different years.
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, around a third of the student population chose
Spanish
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 as their second
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.
Similarly
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, the percentage of
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 who had another language and two other languages increased by about 5%.
In contrast
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students
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 who were interested in French displays a slight decrease. Their percentage was about 20% and it had reached 10%.
Likewise
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, the number of
students
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 who did not like other languages fell to 10%.
Apart from
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this
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students
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 selected
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 remained unchanged, which was one in 10. All in all,
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Spanish
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 was very trendy among British
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 at university in 2000 and 2010.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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