The line graph represents the percentage of visitors to England who experienced four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph represents the percentage of visitors to England who experienced four different attractions in Brighton.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph represents the percentage of visitors to England who experienced four different attractions in Brighton.
The graph
elucidtes
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elucidates
the percentage of visitors who travelled to
Brigthon
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Brighton
and what
did
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apply
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they
like
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liked
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the most from 1980 to 2010. In general,
pavillion
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pavilion
registered the highest in terms of attraction across the period,
whereas
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pier was the least attractive
depending
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, depending
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on the
tourist's
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tourists'
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responses. Notably, all of the places started relatively close to around 20% to 30% to each other in 1980
but
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pier, which started with 10% in 1980. pavillion increased
drastivally
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drastically
reaching
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, reaching
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a proportion of 40% in 1990, followed by just under 50% in 1995.
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, pier increased to around 15% in 1985, but receded to under 10% in 1990,
then
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kept increasing gradually
reaching
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over 20% in 2010.
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,
art
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the art
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gallery's attractiveness increased to over 35% in 1985, but decreased sharply to 20% in 1990,
but
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and
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decreased reaching under 10% in 2010.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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