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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The chart depicts the proportions of Australia’s exports to Japan, the US,
China
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, and
India
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.
Overall
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, Japan had the highest percentage of exports in the beginning but faced a significant decline over the entire
period
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,
while
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China
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 was exactly the opposite of
this
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. The US' proportion was fluctuating, and
India
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's gradually increased and
then
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 dropped slightly. In detail, Japan had the highest percentage in 1990, with just above 25% and decreased consistently every year to around 17% in 2012. The US had the second-highest proportion at the start of the
period
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 , at around 11% but has fluctuated through the whole
period
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 and ended up declining to nearly 7%.
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,
China
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's rate was the second lowest of the four countries at the start of the recorded
period
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,
while
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India
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 was the lowest of them all.
China
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's share increased significantly over the course of all years, peaking at roughly 28% in 2012.
Whereas
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India
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's remained steady at 1% from 1990 to 2000,
then
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 it began to increase slowly to approximately 7% in 2010; after that, it fell a little to 5% in the
last
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 year of the
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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