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The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table demonstrates the
amount
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number
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 of
hour
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hours
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 in minutes spent by Britons men and
women
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 each day on entertainment
actions
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activities
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 in three different categories
and
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, and
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 the chart indicates housing activities divided by four different factors
namely
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, namely
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, cooking and washing, shopping, repairing and
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also
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 clothes washing and ironing in 2008.
It is clear that
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,
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 the number of males and females
on
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spending leisure activities
were
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was
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 similar
and
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, and
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in addition
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 ,
in
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household cooking and washing
by far was
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was by far
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 the most significant category
did
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done
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 by
women
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. On entertainment, both groups had
spend
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spent
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 the highest minutes in media
such
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 as watching
Tv
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TV
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, listening to
Radio
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the Radio
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 and playing videos.
In contrast
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, the negligible minutes were in sports. On household actions
,
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in
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 most
cases
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cases,
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women
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 spend the most on these
activities
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actions
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.
Approxiamately
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Approximately
close
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75% of females did cooking and washing per day
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while
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, while
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,
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 the males did not.
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However
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However,
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women
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 did not spend any
activity
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time
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 on
repairing
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repairing,
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 whilst men
did
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spent
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 almost 20% on it.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparison
  • Household activities
  • Leisure activities
  • Average
  • Significantly more/less
  • Markedly more/less
  • Striking difference
  • Counterparts
  • Societal norms
  • Differing interests
  • Dedicated time
  • Household tasks
  • Maintenance
  • Repairs
  • Pursuits
  • Socializing
  • Gender divide
  • Traditional roles
  • Allocation of time
  • Reflects
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