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Band 2

universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what eztent do you agree or disagree? agree: - gender equality in professions - both males and females have capable of developing in the same areas.

Universitties
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Universities
 class
accetance
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acceptance
 rules
not necessarily should
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should not necessarily
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 be equal for male and female numbers from my
prespective
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perspective
. I totally agree with the gender
equality
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 between
males
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 and females, but in some situations it should not be mandatory like each place and situation
have
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has
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it
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its
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 one rules and it should be flexible and could be changed
according to
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 the conditions and circumstances.
Furthermore
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, in my opinion
males
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 and females should be accepted in the class
according to
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 graduation priority no matter whither the number of gender
equality
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 is more or less for both, which is the same with coworkers in companies and institutions, as I previously mentioned that in many workplace environments
males
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 are more than femals, so it should be considered as the need and diversity of the place not only the
equality
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.
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,
equality
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 in general should be within
gendar
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gender
 accepted in all places
like
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, like
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 women should be able to work in any place she
want
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wants
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also
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, also
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males
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, but not in certain numbers or
amounts
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amounts,
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whith
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which
it
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apply
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could be determined by the situation and
also
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 flexibility.

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task response
Make a clear plan before you write. Decide your view first and stick to it in every part.
structure
Add a short opening sentence to state your view. End with a clear last line to sum up.
coherence
Use one point per paragraph. Start with the idea, then give one or two tiny facts or ideas to back it up.
development
Ask yourself: what do I want to say? Then use simple facts or examples to back it up.
language
Make your language clean. Use easy words. Check for spelling and grammar.
content
The writer has a clear aim to discuss gender and rules.
content
There are some good ideas about balance and flexibility.
language
Some sentences are understandable and show effort.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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