Should companies ensure that they employ a quota (or fixed percentage) of women in all jobs, or is this an impractical concept? Discuss both sides of this debate, and reach a conclusion based on your own opinion.

In the prevailing era, gender

difference

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declining. It is an argued issue whether the number of women should be fixed or not.

This

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essay will not only discuss both viewpoints, but my opinion

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also

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highlighted

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while

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concluding

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. Commencing with the most salient reason why people think that companies should hire

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percentage of women is that it can promote gender equality. Some of them are less likely to face systemic

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job

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market.

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, it is sometimes quite hard for them to get

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a general

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job in a warehouse due because of their gender. If their number is fixed, they will get equal opportunities as men. Despite its given arguments, I believe that employers should not recruit a quota of women

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jobs. Recruitment should be based on the recruiter's education, personality, and qualifications. So that

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everyone can

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In your intro, state your view clearly and give a short plan. End with a clear conclusion that repeats your view.

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Add more detail to each side. Give simple facts or ideas to back up what you say.

coherence cohesion

Finish every sentence and use proper parts. Right now some lines stop early like 'So that, everyone can'.

coherence cohesion

Use linking words to join ideas. Use first, next, however, in addition, for example, to help the flow.

task focus

The essay asks to discuss both sides and gives a view.

content

There is some idea of why a fixed number could help with equality.

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Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

145 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

quota
diversity
historical imbalances
meritocracy
underrepresented
gender inequality
tokenism
administrative challenge
nuanced policies
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