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Band 4.5

You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employe. In your letter: Remind your employer what the course was about Explain why the course was useful to you in your work Suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues

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 week,
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 attended a training
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 which was about risk management. As you all know
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 our work as a financial institution
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its
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 very important that we keep updated with economic data and news
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moreover
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moreover,
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this
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 sector is very wide
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 we should all be able to be informed,
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 and improve our information.
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,
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perspective,
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this
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course
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 is very important to me because
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 learned how to evaluate the risk
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 the minimum amount of given information
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. Sometimes
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, tasks
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 input
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of tasks is
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 not clear or
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 so you have to deal with what you have been given and adapt the information positively and evaluate the situation from different points.
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, the
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 is very professional and requires
advanced
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an advanced
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 level of analysis and knowledge with specific requirements from people who
was
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 participating in it or thinking
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of taking
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 and engaging with.
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, in our
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 there
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 freshly graduated
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people who
 have no experience yet in the requirements of
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course
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, which
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 suggest that
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they not
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 worry and waste
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 time
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this
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course
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 unless they have more than 5 years of experience and above.

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structure
The letter has no greeting or closing. Add a short 'Dear [Name],' at the start and 'Yours sincerely,' at the end.
structure
Split the text into three small parts. One for the course name, one for why useful, one for why not for some workers.
style
Use simple link words to help flow, like 'also', 'in addition', 'however' and 'therefore'.
content
Give more clear example of what you learned and how.
language
Check grammar and spelling to keep a formal tone.
content
The writer mentions all three points asked: course content, usefulness, and limits for others.
tone
The tone is polite and shows a wish to help the employer.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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