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Band 3.5

Write a letter to the manager of your local bus service. They have recently made some changes to the bus services which created inconveniences for you. In your letter, explain: what are the changes the problems you are facing which parts of the service you would like to change

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to raise a
complain
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complaint
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 regarding changes to the bus service that
has
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have
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 been affecting the residents of my area. I raised the complaint informally several times,
problem
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the problem
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continues
Verb problem
apply
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persists and
create
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creates
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the
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a
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 great inconvenience to people.
Firstly
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, the rise in fares of public transport, especially buses and trains.
Secondly
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, the
timming
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timing
 of the buses
have
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has
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 been changed by the manager
which
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, which
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cause
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causes
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 significant inconvenience for me and the members of the community. These changes cause
delay
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a delay
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for
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in
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 the office
which
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, which
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 only negatively impacts my reputation, but
also
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reduce
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reduces
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 my work efficiency.
Moreover
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, financial burden on poor and
middle class
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middle-class
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 families caused by the rise
of
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in
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 fares.
Therfore
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Therefore
,I would like to change the
timming
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timing
 of the buses. I believe
this
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 issue
need
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needs
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 immediate attention. I truly hope you will investigate
this
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 matter seriously. I will look forward to a positive and prompt response.

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task response
Your letter says what changed and what happened. To get a higher score, state one main point per paragraph and add clearer steps.
coherence
Use link words like first, next, and finally to show the order of ideas. This helps flow.
coherence
Open with a clear aim in the first line and end with a polite closing.
language accuracy
Check words like complain, timing, persist, and great so you spell them right.
content
You show what the changes are and how they affect people.
content
You name two main problems: fare rise and bus timing.
tone
The letter keeps a formal tone.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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