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You are soon goi na to spend three months doing work experience in an organization. Write a letter to the manager of the organization where you are going to do work experience.in your letter Thank the manager for the opportunity to do work experience Explain what you hope to learn from the work experience Ask some questions about the work experience you are going to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
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 letter finds you in good health and spirits.I am writing to you
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 letter in regards to the
three months
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work
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 experience I will be starting soon in your
organization
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organisation
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.
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, I am Esther Osei, a professional Medical Laboratory Scientist.I would like to thank you for giving me the opportunity to do my
work
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 experience
in
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 Tees Healthcare Limited.I really appreciate
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, and I am really grateful for
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 chance.
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 is because
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 it
had
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 always been my dream to
work
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 with
in
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your noble company.
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,there are some skills I hope to learn from
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work
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 experience.Phlebotomy is one of the most important skills .
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I want to gain more knowledge on how to take blood samples from people
especially
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, especially
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 kids.
As kids
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Kids
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 are very difficult to deal with.I hope
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 company will educate me more on how to skillfully
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this
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 task.
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,there are some questions I would like to ask.Do I have to bring my own Laboratory coat
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your facility will
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will your facility
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 provide it for free
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, since
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 is a 3-month program,can I start before the month ends?
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,do I need to bring any form of Identification
or
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a
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name tag
will
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be provided at the healthcare
center
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centre
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? Thanks for your time.Please do not hesitate to contact me if you need any information about me.
Mr
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 phone number is 0075857912. Yours
Faithfully
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, Esther.

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improvement
Make the plan clear. Put your main aim at the start of the letter. Thank the manager clearly. Say what you want to learn in one or two lines. Ask two clear questions.
grammar
Make the flow smooth. Break long lines into short parts. Use simple words and small sentences.
tips
Use a formal tone all through. Begin with Dear Sir or Madam and end with Yours faithfully. Check the name and the contact detail.
organization
Keep one idea in each paragraph. Use clear signs like First, Next, Finally to show the steps.
accuracy
Be careful with spelling and big words. For example, phlebotomy and identification; keep the letters neat and correct.
strength
Include positive notes about your strength. For example, you show thanks, and you want to learn useful skills.
strength
Polite tone and clear thanks.
strength
Clear aim to learn a skill (phlebotomy) and to ask questions.
strength
Good closing and offer to provide more info.
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