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the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevont Write of least 150 words. Export

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevont Write of least 150 words. Export
The bar chart
is illustrate
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illustrates
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value
Correct article usage
the value
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 of one country’s exports in various
categories
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 during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage
change
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 in each
country of
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country's
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 exports in 2016 compared with 2015. The bar chart shows 5
categories
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various
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varying
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 in export, there
is
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are
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 petroleum
products
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, engineered goods,
germs
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gems
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 and jewellery,
agriculture
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agricultural
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products
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, and the
last
Linking Words
 is
textile
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textiles
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. Every
that
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category
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categories
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have
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has
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change
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changed
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 during 2015 compared
2016
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to 2016
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. In
2016
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2016,
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 petroleum
products
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 and engineered goods
is
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changed
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change
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, up
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up
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with
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 petroleum
products
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 3% and engineered 8.5%.
Howeever
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However
in
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, in
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 2016, four out of five
have
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had
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a
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an
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increase
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percentages
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in percentages
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, but not for Gems and
jewelerry
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jewellery
, the only one that
have
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had
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reduction
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a reduction
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5.18
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of 5.18
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%, and
is
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it is
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 not a small number.
Eventhough
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Even though
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the agriculture
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agriculture
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agricultural
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 product just up only 0.81% but is still
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increase
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an increase
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in percentages
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percentages
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percentage
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. The
last
Linking Words
 is textiles the most compared
increase
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 percentages from 2015 until 2016, textile
change
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 in 15.24. In 5
categories
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, all of them
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change
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changed
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 in 2015 compared
in
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to
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 2016,
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increase
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increasing
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 or even
have
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having
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 a reduction.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, change, products, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
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