You work in a busy but poorly organized office and you are keen to be promoted. Your employer needs to find a new supervisor for your department. Write a letter to your employer. In the letter • Ask to be considered for this job • Explain why you would be a suitable candidate • Outline the current problems and the changes you would like to make

Dear Mrs Roanne, I am writing to promote myself for
kitchen
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lead position in our Restaurant , as you are looking for someone who can be able to reorganise the kitchen and its team. I feel I have the required qualification and experience.
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, I graduated from Vancouver Community College, where I studied Culinary Arts and Hospitality Management.
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, I have had experience in
this
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industry for 15 years in 3 Fine-Dining restaurants.
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, I have worked over here for the
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7 years , which
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me understand how our restaurant operates and our values. To be more specific, I realised that there have been some serious issues in surviving our company , including human resources, management and partners. If I am a supervisor, it is vital to cut
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the number of staff. It is because some position feels unnecessary and that haults the progress. Second change I will do is to change the supplier, which helps the restaurant in saving financials and upgrading food quality.
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, it is essential to train staff on all stations to reduce the expectancy on one. Should you be more interested in my qualifications and experience as a supervisor, please do not hesitate to contact me for more information. Looking forward to hearing from you ! Your sincerely

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grammar
Fix big grammar mistakes and odd phrases; e.g., 'can be able' should be 'can' or 'able to', 'surviving' should be 'running' or 'managing', 'haults' should be 'halts'.
tone
Keep a formal tone. Avoid blunt lines about cutting staff; say you aim to use staff well and plan changes with care.
format
Close the letter correctly: 'Yours sincerely,' and tidy up punctuation.
structure
Break into clear paragraphs: intro, why you fit, problems and plan, closing.
vocabulary
Use simple words and short sentences. Avoid long or hard words; check that most words are common.
content
Clear aim to apply for a lead role.
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Shows long time in the job and good knowledge of the place.
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Gives practical ideas to improve the kitchen.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • keen to be promoted
  • suitable candidate
  • supervisor role
  • relevant experience
  • organizational abilities
  • problem-solving skills
  • familiarity with current problems
  • impact on productivity
  • streamlining processes
  • improving communication channels
  • introducing new tools and technologies
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